Remembering #fridayflash The Mermaid Mini Flash Saga Continues

A Mermaid by John William Waterhouse.
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     The young mermaid sat on the beach combing her silken hair. Behind her stone walls and partial roofs clung to the side of the mountain. Here, in this place, a strange feeling came over her. Something deep inside whispered words she couldn’t understand. The spirits had marked this place. Not even her kind swam near the shore, it was forbidden.

     The mermaid swished her tail at the edge of the water and laughed. She laid back and closed her eyes. As much as the Elders tried they couldn’t contain her. Not even her mother could stop her from coming. She flipped her tail against the smooth pebbles and let the sun warm her skin and scales. This place always comforted her. Everything about it made the longing her heart disappear. 

     The sun blazed, her eyes fluttered. Behind her voices echoed in the village. She craned her neck to see who dared walk into her sanctuary. No one was there; the streets were empty as they always were.  A cloud passed over the sun. Darkness masked the streets and the voices turned to screams. Shadows cast themselves along the crevices. The crumbling walls were marked with dark red streaks. Shouts for mercy went unheard as swords clashed against one another.

     Frightened she shook the images away. When she opened her eyes, the cloud had passed, the streets were once again filled with light. The only thing the sun didn’t take away was the dull ache in her chest that told her something terrible had happened there and that she was part of it.


14 Comments Add yours

  1. John Wiswell says:

    Ephemeral and evocative, took me back to having read at least one of the prior entries. Lovely painting as the lead-in, too.

    1. Lara Dunning says:

      @Deanna Thank you for commenting.

      @Helen Thank you.

      @John Wiswell I think that is my favorite pic. Could be used in so many different stories. Thank you.

  2. Helen says:

    Very evocative Lara, and beautifully writtern.

  3. Deanna Schrayer says:

    Beautifully written indeed – love this Lara!

  4. Anne Michaud says:

    You have truly captured a unique world of killer mermaids. I’m loving this series very much, Lara:)

    1. Lara Dunning says:

      Thanks Anne. Its strange I never saw them in this light before, but it just developed with that first story and it’ll be fun to see where it takes me.

  5. Steve Green says:

    A gentle conclusion to balance the violence of the past, the orphan from the village still has close ties to home.

    1. Lara Dunning says:

      I wanted to keep the past lingering, a dim memory, something she can hold on to and lash out at.

  6. Richard Bon says:

    Well written and certainly left me wanting more.

    1. Lara Dunning says:

      @ Chuck Allen @Richard Bon Thank you

  7. Chuck Allen says:

    An interesting addition to the series. I like the haunting feeling she has at this place. It leaves a lot of room for imagination.

  8. Very intriguing. You give just enough a hint of the massacre (or at least that what I imagined) and her connection to it to draw us in, with out being overly graphic or losing the mystery. Loved it.

  9. Hi there Lara — I really liked this. Great when your writing kicks into this sort of reminiscent feel. Liked that fleeting shadow.

    Lovely Pre Raphaelite painting.

    This bit read a little strangely: “As much as the Elders tried they couldn’t contain.” Should there be a ‘her’ at the end?

    Looking forward to any further parts.


    1. Lara Dunning says:

      Thanks for catching that typo and the comments. Blushing.

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